Cut the Repetition

Worked classroom example

Science

Worked example

Edit a short report that repeats the same result in several sentences.

Use this example to make the language move visible. Select subject content appropriate to the class’s age and prior knowledge.

Teaching sequence

1. Prepare a paragraph with repeated information and share the purpose: editing for concision. Keep the source or subject question visible.
2. Underline repeated ideas. Keep the clearest version, then use a reference word or transition to connect the remaining point.
3. Ask learners to show the clue, language choice or evidence they used. Invite one partner to check it, then finish with an independent response.

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Prepare

Use a paragraph with repeated information. Choose a second example that checks the same language move without repeating the original answer.

Classroom task

Underline repeated ideas. Keep the clearest version, then use a reference word or transition to connect the remaining point.

Check independent transfer

Ask learners to show the clue, language choice or evidence they used. Invite one partner to check it, then finish with an independent response.

Collect a response on fresh content. Note what was achieved without the model, partner or teacher prompt, then choose one next teaching step.

Teacher language

Teacher language

What did you notice about editing for concision, and what evidence helped you decide?

Respond to the learner

Identify one successful meaning or language choice. Ask about one gap, allow thinking time, then invite a revision. Check the revised move again on a fresh example.

Adjust support and challenge

Offer a brief model, useful vocabulary and partner rehearsal where needed. Keep the subject goal; reduce one prompt on fresh content and record what was independent.

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More support

Use oral rehearsal, a brief model and a limited sentence frame. Remove one support for the fresh writing task. Allow familiar-language notes or another response mode when checking subject understanding.

Greater independence

Change the content, evidence or audience. Remove the completed model and ask learners to explain a choice. Increase subject complexity only when it fits the curriculum and prior knowledge.

Choose the next step

If subject meaning is insecure, reteach the concept. If the concept is understood but the English is unclear, model one useful language relationship and invite a fresh response.