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Short narrative

Build a change through a character’s choices.

50 minutesModel · planning · independent task

Classroom practice; use your course’s own task instructions for assessment.

1Set up
2Develop
3Resolve
A planning illustration: connect events through decisions and consequences, rather than adding unrelated incidents.
A planning illustration: connect events through decisions and consequences, rather than adding unrelated incidents.

Complete annotated model

Task: Tell a short story in which Mina loses a borrowed camera and nearly makes an unfair accusation.

Read the complete model in the centre. Explore highlighted grammar and vocabulary on the left, and match numbered passages to structure notes on the right.

Original classroom teaching model. Use the actual course task and word limit for assessment; the labels here are teaching descriptions, not awarded grades.

The complete text

1

Mina put the borrowed camera on the low wall while she tied her shoe. Her friend her to return it after photographing the school garden, and she had spent the afternoon checking that the lens stayed clean. When she stood up, the place beside her bag was empty. She looked once, then again. The camera was gone.

2

A boy stood near the gate, holding something dark. Mina felt the forming before she had worked out what she had actually seen. He had been the only person nearby. Surely that meant he knew something. She took a step towards him. beneath the bench caught her attention: a narrow strap stirred in the wind.

3

Mina knelt beside the wall. A gap ran between two loose stones, just wide enough for the camera to slide through. She reached beneath the bench and drew it out by the strap. A dry leaf clung to the case, but the lens was . Behind her, the boy lifted the dark object to his mouth. It was a water bottle.

4

She checked the camera once more and stood up. At the gate she paused. “Sorry,” she said. The boy looked puzzled; he had never heard the accusation. Mina could have pretended that nothing had happened, but the apology mattered to her. She put the camera safely inside her bag and walked back to her friend, noticing how quickly an empty space had become a story she almost believed.

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Compare three responses

Task: Tell a short story in which Mina loses a borrowed camera and nearly makes an unfair accusation.

The weak and good options isolate choices for comparison. The excellent option shows the complete teaching response. These are not awarded grades. Compare specific choices rather than treating length or complicated vocabulary as automatic quality.

Good: comparison extract

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